Tempting Fate

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Short. Simple. Bloody. Absolutely brilliant!!! I really loved this it's one of the best things I've read since joining. Keep up the good work :)




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I feel this is a bit abrupt. My favorite lines would be "the ferryman arrives, I have no fare"... but right after that, you seem to go directly to the end. A transition couplet would be nice. Overall, good rhythm, a unique breakup sort of poem that speaks directly to the reader. Not bad.
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It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien