A remembrance of my friendship...

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To My Best Friend

Often I’ve wondered what are you to me,
And now the answer I want you to see.

Its like living in a world without sunshine,
‘Cause you are not here to calm me when I whine.

Whenever I was a little or more blanch,
You filled my life with happiness as much as an avalanche.

You were there when I needed you beside,
Always helping me to properly decide.

You never Left me alone or weepy,
Even if my talks made you bored and sleepy.

You were unique and one of kind,
And now also you keep strolling into my mind.

You have a place no one can reach,
We spoke continuously when our teacher used to teach.

The moments we shared, the way for me you cared,
Will always be in my mind beared.

People may think this is just to say,
But let me assure you words are always true, my way.

Weather I go to Atlantic, so cold,
Or to Africa to brave the heat bold.

Now as I look back into the time,
How so often we used to pluck unripe lime.

While I live here,
I have to tread with care.

So many pains I have to suffer,
To avoid a life full of blunder.

Though here I have a number of friends,
But unlike me, their lives are empty of bends.

From you though I had a number of trials,
But never did I face a betrayal.

That is why my best friend you are,
Without whom my life would be like a driver without car.

That is why you are my true friend,
Who will not leave me even after the world ends.

So here I have my story finished,
When all my fears and worries have perished.

Harshita Chaarag.
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To My Best Friend:


and now, the answer I want you to see.


It's like living in a world without sunshine,
‘Ccause you are not here to calm me when I whine.


you filled my life with happiness as much as an avalanche.


You were there when I needed you beside.
Always helping me to properly decide.
The top line doesn't make any sense. It should be "You were there when I needed you beside me." But I see that you're trying to ryhme, I think you'll just need to change the wording or think of a different example.

You never left me alone or weepy,
even if my talks made you bored and sleepy.


You were unique and one of kind
and now you keep strolling into my mind.
This line is really good, nice job :D

but let me assure you words are always true my way.


Whether I go to Atlantic, so cold,
or to Africa to brave the heat bold.


Now as I look back into time,
how so often we used to pluck unripe lime.


to avoid a life full of blunder.


But here I have a number of friends,
though, unlike me, their lives are empty of bends.
I love this line

From you, though I had a number of trials,
I never did face a betrayal.


without whom my life would be like a driver without car.


who will not leave me,
even after the world ends.
This should be another line, although it uproots the flow of two lines a stanza... Keep it two lines or make it three, your choice.

So here I have my story finished,
when all my fears and worries have perished.


I see you're new here so, welcome!!

I liked this poem, it was nice and deep which is what I like in a poem or story, congrats on that!! You had a few bumpy parts that un-did the flow a bit but most of it was pretty smooth, good job!!!

Keep writing,
Alzora
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This is truly awesome...
It touched my heart.... It invokes raw emotions...
Its a very good piece with the true facts of life...
Great rhyming and flow...
I loved it..
Keep up the good work... :)
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Really great poem. I can somehow relate that's why I almost cried. I once had a best friend. Everyday, we were always together. Then we had some misunderstandings and she never wants me back. I just moved on, never thought of a way to get us back together and forgot all about her. And when I read this poem, I suddenly remembered her and all the time we've spent together. I just shared my story. LOL. I really liked your poem especially this part that goes

"You have a place no one can reach,
We spoke continuously when our teacher used to teach."

But I don't get what you mean about this part

"Though here I have a number of friends,
But unlike me, their lives are empty of bends"

I think you can put more memorable situations to get your best friend touched. What a terrific best friend you have. I wish your friendship would last forever :)

Thank you. Reading this poem made me realized that I once had an amazing friend like yours. Thank you, I'm just new here you know. LOL.
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