Purple Lipstick on my Collar (UPDATED 5/15)

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Love it. I can't wait to read more.
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I'm not usually into reading gay stories.. but this is a good story.
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The only wrong love is only one never felt.
Live to day as if your would die tomorrow.
Love like you know no other, dream as if they'd come true, hope because you can reach the stars.




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this was quite a story. i have to ask, how long didi it take you to write all of this? i triy t write alot, but i never have teh time or teh patience. help a fellow writer out please. i like the imagry you put into the story. it really jumped out ot me. i wish you teh best of luck witht is and look forwrd to finishing it.
It's the one, the only, the incredible COREY!!!!!
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Hey, aren't you going to continue this?! You can't just leave us hanging. WRITE MORE. Sorry I have no critiques; I was too into the story.

Waiting for more.




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woah, i actually read all of this !
you're really really good with description,
i really like this :D
its super good!
"in spite of everything, i still think people are good at heart" - anne frank.




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Okay, so this is very good. Your characters are great, and all of your description and imagery has got me hooked.

There is so much that I cannot possibly point out all of your grammar mistakes, so i\I suggest that you read through the entire thing yourself. I am sure you will catch your mistakes and some sentences that do not make sense.

Also, is Renee's last name Willis or Wilks? What is Shannon's last name? I thought Shannon's was Wilks, but you refer to Renee's mom as Mrs./Ms. Wilks in some chapters. I am confused about that.

Anyway, I have been hooked on this whole thing, and I cannot wait for more.

Good job!
How hard can it be to just let go and drift away with the wind?




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Wow, that was long,
obviously not too long if I read all of it in 2 hours XD
You must be so proud of me!
I really enjoyed it, but I was wondering what your inspiration for this story was?
Too hard of a question for you?
Can't step up to the challenge?!?!?!
lol jkjk!
good job!
~JVM
If you prick us, shall we not bleed?
If you tickle us, shall we not laugh?
If you poison us, shall we not die?
If you wrong us, shall we not revenge?
The Merchants of Venice-Shakespear
Love the life u live,
and live the life u love



The secret of being tiresome is to tell everything.
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