Oh Henry

Well I don't know much about Henry the 8th but your knowledge is clearly good.
It seems more like a song than a poem in my opinion

ashleymae wrote:Look at what you have just did

this line is not really grammatically correct. It should be "Look what your have just done" I'm guessing you did it to rhyme but it would sound better not rhyming than not making sense.
Well I think it's an alright poem but it kinda seems like you've just put all the facts down and haven't put much emotion into it. Most of it is just a report that rhymes. I guess this is because you aren't really emotionally connected to Henry the 8th. You would be better off to write poems about things that you can relate to.

Happy Writing.

I agree with the first reviewer on the fact that this sounds like a song. Also, impressive how much you know about this! I think this wealth of knowledge was the primary thing that kept me reading through such a long poem, because I definately didn't know all this stuff. But the problem is, your words just didn't have enough impact. Saying things like "tend to sin" and the voice that speaks to him like a child just kind of weakened your point. That's just my opinion though. The other thing was it seemed kind of like a factual list, too much of a lesson and not enough of a story. It's not too bad, though - all the same, this is a hard topic to write about. Like the person before me said, try finding subjects you can relate to more. You'll find how much easier it is to write about something you can relate to.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

I enjoyed the poem, but like the above comment, it seems more of a song. The flow was nice, and the wording. All in all a very enjoyable read.

Yep! Definitely song material. I would love to see this in some sort of thing in a history class so we can get the history of the wives straight... I always mix up his wives, lol. The one thing about this poem was the farther along it gets, the less inspired it becomes, so after a while it seems a little droll. Even so, good job on making this song! Tweak it, put music to it, and it'll be pretty awesome.