Runner Ch. 1 (revised)

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Hmm, I like how you started without a lot detail. It kind of summarizes it and gets the reader into it. Also, it was wise to not have the entire story like that. I was glad there was some dialogue in it.
But it was slightly boring. There must be a million orphanage escape stories that start out like this. Give us readers a twist. Surprise us. Give us something to hook us. Raise the stakes, make us know something that Jackson doesn't. Then we'll be concerned for him, and thous hooking the reader. Just a suggestion.
Definitely keep going. I agree with LittlePetRock that you have talent.

~Crazy

Well, you have the talent. Keep writing. You use a lot of detail and description, so I can actually see the place that you're writing about, which is a flaw in some of the writers on YWS. Only one complaint.

Jackson was just like any other orphan. He had lost his family in a car accident when he was only three years old.

I seriously doubt every other orphan had lost his family to a car accident, so get rid of that first line, in my opinion. I also agree with LittlePetRock that should be taken out. But expand your ideas a little bit. This is a lot like other stories, such as Logan's Run, but not in the future. I stil like the story, don't get me wrong, but you can improve.