Yo, still bursts of very convincing style. At times a little over the top, like the house being empty like a seashell, but Ray Bradbury does that in every sentence and gets away with it completely, so who am I to complain. The receptionist sequence brought up two thoughts in me: one - a little more bluffing in the start of the inquiery please, makes me feel unsafe that receptionists give info so easily hehe; two, the lovely sentence in which she writes the number on her forearm and thanks the receptionist, has a flowing rhythm, but to finish it appropriately, she should then hung up the phone. You know - if its a 'describe the elements of the situation' sentence - take it to the logical limit. Good budding use of metaphores
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness. Robert Howard
I want to shake off the dust of this one-horse town. I want to explore the world. I want to watch TV in a different time zone. I want to visit strange, exotic malls...I want to live, Marge! Won't you let me live? — Homer Simpson
