Why i Write

I write for the same reason i breath
If I didn't I would die
Without words to express myself
Life's a broken winged bird that can't fly

I write down my soul word for word
I write things I could never say
without this method of expression
I would cry everyday

I try to forget all the regret
Or else life is mine to miss
Without saying what I truly feel
Then I'll always stay like this

So I write for the same reason I breath
it's so that bird can fly up to the sky
I need to rise higher and higher
And finally stop asking why

Oof! Can you say proofread?!
Here I go...

I write for the same reason I breath.
If I didn't, I would die.
Without words to express myself,
Life would be a broken winged bird that can't fly. I would change 'life is a' to the bolded.

I write down my should word for word This line doesn't make sense to me!
I write things I could never say.
without this method of expression,
I would cry everyday

I try to forget all the regret,
Or else life is mine to miss
Without saying what I truly feel
Then I'll always stay like this.This line doesn't make sense to me either.
So I write for the same reason I breath.
It'sso that bird can fly up to the sky.
I need to rise higher and higher
And finally stop asking why.Your last four lines were the only I truly liked!

Overall, I really think you should proofread, and you also need to add punctuation. Just because it is a poem, doesn't mean it doesn't deserve periods!
Now, your poem was meaninful, and written somewhat okay. What your saying makes sense, it just bored me a little...
Like I said before, the last four lines are the only I liked. Watch out on YWS, and anywhere else: readers will not want to read if they instantly spot issues!
Hope I helped!
~Classy

sorry i was in a rush im gonna fix it lol , it should say soul not should

Ha, I am glad you went back to fix it. Editing only takes a second!
~Classy

lol me too im mostly happ that u decided to help tho its greatly appreiated (:

OOhh if you wouldnt mind could you go under Lyrical Peotry and read my newest post called The Eyes of an Angel? i f you could i would be verry happy THANKS!!

I have just one quick suggestion.

A broken winged bird that can't fly

is redundant.
I think you should shorten it to

A broken winged bird

I like this poem so much and I really really agree with you, I feel this way myself! Only question is the "broken winged bird" analogy (sounds like Hughes' "Dreams"), I don't really mind, just wonder if some would think you copied.... (though I know you probably didn't). Other than that, I think this is a very good piece.

Hello, Darth Maul! Allow me to review your very excellent poem. I read it through and I absolutley loved it! The content was perfect, and it kept me hooked from beginning to end. However, you did have alot of grammatical errors, which I think everyone else pointed out. I'm sorry I couldn't write a longer review, but I couldn't find anything that wasn't already said. Always make sure to look over your work before you post it. Reading aloud helps alot, too.

PM if you have questions.

Hi
I think you have really good metaphors in this poem, and it might actually work better without the rhyme scheme, since some of the rhymes sound a little stretched and you would be able to work in the words that you really want to say.
Just a note: breath is a noun, you want to use breathe.