Wrists in Red

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Tay
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Fri Nov 06, 2009 10:07 pm
Tay says... · Fri Nov 06, 2009 10:07 pm
I took this knife to my vein,
Because I feel I'm going insane.

And I bleed in the dark,
Just to make one more mark.

I feel the need,
to continue to bleed.

The sight is so empowering,
But the cutting is just devouring.

And the rush of it all,
Right before I fall,
Is every reason more,
To do it again.
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LovelessSummer
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Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:27 am
LovelessSummer says... · Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:27 am
Wow, this was nice, very emotional. I liked it. I didn't see any errors, but then again, I almost never do. Just pay attention to what you write and make sure you spell check and grammar check it before you post. Last thing, I noticed you don't have any reviews, fix that.

Well, that's all, bye-bye!
XOXOXO
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darthmaul1001
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Sat Nov 07, 2009 11:39 pm
darthmaul1001 says... · Sat Nov 07, 2009 11:39 pm
WOW! That was great. Umm i didnt see any gramatical errors so ur doing good with that, and i liked the way the lines rhyme, it makes it a little more appealing to some people. In total liked it and please tell me ur not emo!!! if so try to stop cutting (:
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