Poetry help!

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I need tips on writing poems. Here's what I mean...v_v

What's this?
You say I am so kind
a fake,
a lie,
a smile,
It doesn't matter
A separate part of me watches,
wonders,
Am I really kind?
flawlessly,
effortlessly,
delusionally,
My heart is empty,
yet slowly filling up
You still love me,
unknowingly
to the truth inside of me
Is kindness really love,
or rather,
a way to push you back?
Has kindness become something,
empty,
false,
ugly?
What now?






Anyone can give me tips and possible ways to improve?!
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If this is yours, you should totally post this on the poetry forums so that people can give you more thorough critiques! If this isn't yours, then... well... those sorts of poems need to have personality injected in them. That is, it's just a bunch of random questions put together. Anybody can write them. I can write something like that in two minutes without thinking, just because I've done so many bad poems. So you have to ask yourself, "What makes this mine?" and then add the necessary detail to make it your own.
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