young love

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me and the first person i ever love + a poem i wrote :)



your you.
im me.
too very different people
its hard to belive...
but we are in love.
noone understands.
but one day i know..
he'll take my hand.
we fight,we love, we lose, we hurt.
but we always return to each other.
and its hard to believe.
we both know..
in the end it'll be you and me
once again
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"isn't it supposed to be like this? the glory of first love, and all that. it's incredible, isn't it, the difference between reading about something, seeing it in the pictures, and experiencing it?"---twilight




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Your you.

I’m me.

Too very different people

It’s hard to believe...

But
we are in love.

No one
understands.

But one day I know...


He'll
take my hand.

We fight, we love, we lose, we hurt.

But
we always return to each other.

And
it’s hard to believe.

We both know…

In the end it'll be you and me,

[/b]Once again

[b](Words in black, corrections) Over all, very good poem. The only thing is, you had one or two spelling mistakes and your caps were missing. Other then that, brilliant. Keep up the good work.
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i'm really happy for both of you *hugs* :D
Qui vivra, verra...




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were not dating anymore
just good friends :roll:
but thanks
"isn't it supposed to be like this? the glory of first love, and all that. it's incredible, isn't it, the difference between reading about something, seeing it in the pictures, and experiencing it?"---twilight




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i'm stiil happy for both of you :D
(not everyone can stay a good friend with the person with who you broke up..)

*hugs*
Qui vivra, verra...




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I truly love the simplicity in this poem yet the meaning it has is heavy on the heart.
Really Good job keep it up..

I would like to see more from you!
I may not be the best writer, But I will do my best!



Act in the valley so that you need not fear those who stand on the hill.
— Danish proverb