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So Molly and Thomas -- brother and sister? Or just friends? *guesses* All in all, good chapter. Molly's interactions with Thomas and Justin gave her more of a personality, and we have a couple more things to chalk to the list. Kid situation and the ministry going on their 'witch hunt'. What happened to the world to make it all like this? And I'm not just talking about the cheap sex prices, but the forest, too. Very odd place, but I'm thinking it was something recent that made it this way (guessing, again). I'm starting to like Thomas as a character, by the way. The beginning of the chapter was a bit choppy, sentence wise, but I'm sure that if you let it set a day or two, you'll be able to do a quick run through and make things flow a bit better. :)
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