Foreign Markets: 1x09 "Revelations" /P

Removed.

Bible Boys for the win. Always my favourite. ^^ (yus, favourite means both are my favourite, together. ^^ Luke *may* pull ahead soon, though. ^^ I adore his humour)

Alex is... Alex... just... Alex. o.O

*snuggles poor Sunshine* Poor woman.

And I love Lena and Ann being all... emotional. It's lovely to see.

You've done so well. ^^ Once again. Oh, I'ma weep when you're season finale comes. Weep I say!

That said... I still wanna see it... soon.

*Hearts and Love* Le Penguin.

JAMES
(incredulously)
You did, didn't you?

You mean, "You didn't, did you?" right? It could work as it is now, but it threw me off a bit. But then, it's three am. Change or keep. Either way.

I have no words for that ending. I think I'll steal from one of my chino crits: as a writer, it was amazing, as a reader, I hate your guts. Wise strategy: cliff hanger = murderous crowd of fans = nagging = people ready to jump on the next piece while it's still fresh = murderous crowd can't harm you because only you can deliver the next bit.

Nags ensure you write, and the fans are a nice touch for anyone.

Beginning had me chuckling, and you were right. It did get serious further in. But I liked it. I now have a new favorite episode. I loved the scene where Lena spilled... it was really really well done. and the ending scene... Gah! I'm going to drive myself mad over that scene.

That was perfect. Painfully so, but good nonetheless.

The characters seem much more fleshed out now than they did at the beginning of the series. Then it was a good read because of the comedy. Now it's a good read because of the characters' individual stories. The last episode served as a smooth transition between the two areas of focus, I think, and now I really do feel my sanity needs the next part. The ending...

Rest assured, you will have no rest now. This time waiting for the next one is going to be painful...

You know I need to sleep tonight, right? >.<

Post the next one soon. Go to sleep tonight, but start planning/writing tomorrow, yes? ...Yes?

Dreamer

*snorts* James is evil in that scene with Simone. Highly amusing...

Alex continues to scare me... And poor Sunshine.. I can only pity the girl.

So... Ann doesn't like babies eh?

Michael scores points in my book. Good boy...

And that's my comments on this episode. Lovely, excellent.. Get the next one up soon.

One more thing... Can I strangle Harvey? He thinks he so brilliant... he's such a conceited ass... Really.. can I strangle him?

~Rea

LUKE
We have that thing tomorrow, with Harvey. We should get home soon.

Simone turns and watches as Luke disappears into the bathroom. James clears his throat, a mischievous grin on his face.

This is a lovely scene but I'd like to see you show Simone's feelings just a little more. At this point, does she perhaps look slightly suspicious or upset? Or is she completely oblivious to the fact that he's trying to ditch her?]

Lena looks over at sulking Luke. [Either '...at Luke who is sulking' or '...at a sulking Luke'.]

James shakes his head.

Alex's eyes light up.

Alex suddenly lifts up [s]as[/s] so that Sunshine is underneath him. He grins down at her.

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This is easily one of my favourite installments. The plot is really starting to thicken, especially concerning Alex and Sunshine. And to think I was actually starting to like him. But then, at the same time, I feel a little sorry for him because I have a feeling she will find the strength to break up with her sooner or later and his does seem to genuinely like her. At times... okay, so maybe not. He's a great character though, one of the best in your script.

Michael's character still feels a little flimsy though you're starting to give him more depth now and I love the fact that he didn't answer Harvey's call. Also, the scene with Ann and the baby was an excellent piece of character development, to see her being mad and then worried but maybe emphasise the change in her emotion more? How now she's pleading with Jeremy that they leave when just a moment before, she seemed completely out of control and in charge.

Another excellent part and I can't wait for the next. You really know how to write a good cliff-hanger.

Awwwwwww.... Michael is such a cutie!

Alex shouldn't be allowed to wear speedos. Yup! And 409? Oh dear... I don't want to know either.

Ann acts like me around babies, something which I found pretty interesting.

And yep. No excuses now... post the finale!

Finally I get around to this! Okay, so. I want more. I'll start off by saying that....why wait?! 0.0 ...next. Alex is crazy! I love him. And now...Summer, gah she's becoming more and more human as we continue on. I feel bad for her...but mostly for Alex because he's completely excited about the wedding. And Simone. Dear lord. She reminds me of my friend, completely obsessed with God, it kills me to be around her and listen to her polite conversation. *shakes my head* This review is messy okay? Because it's about two in the morning and I'm not even close to sane.

Continuing: James and Luke. I adore them. It's like, Jon and Kyle...but not. They're personalities are awesome. I love the prostate scene. XD And Lena is still awesome of course, I'm glad that Michael didn't end up hating her because she's enough of a dramaqueen as it is and that would be a sloppy heartbreak. Ann. She's still bitchy to me, Arielish, but she seems better when she's around Jeremy I must admit. And the baby scene where she was cussing in front of the baby was classic.

Now, I must have more!!! *begs and offers more cookies* please?

~Rieda