I say I hate you,

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The emotion was great, but the way you constructed it wasn't great. All the rhymes were just too forced. Just work on weaving stanzas together and you'll be great.




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Okay, thanks everyone, but this piece wasn't really going to go any where from the start. It was just a quickie, you know?
No where to run...baby let's hide. Take her in your arms on a chilling winter's night. Watch the stars twinkle and glisten. Know that you've found the one person that will listen. ~*(ME)*~




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Hmmm. I like it better but I still think it could use some improving.
Buh-Bye!



That's just what translation is, I think. That's all speaking is. Listening to the other and trying to see past your own biases to glimpse what they're trying to say. Showing yourself to the world, and hoping someone else understands.
— Ramy (Babel by R. F. Kuang)