Same old story

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Mon Apr 07, 2008 7:16 pm
StellaThomas says... · Mon Apr 07, 2008 7:16 pm
I don't usually critique poetry, but I thought this was cute.

Actually, in regard to your first stanza, it bugged me that you didn't put a "girl sees..." oh wait... never mind :D. That's clever, I only just worked it out :D.

It was a good idea, but I feel you could expand more.

Keep writing!

-Stella.
"Stella. You were in my dream the other night. And everyone called you Princess." -Lauren2010
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