Ice Cubes #34

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miyaviloves
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 7:55 pm
miyaviloves says... · Fri Jun 22, 2007 7:55 pm
Taken down due to publishing
Last edited by miyaviloves on Fri Jun 29, 2007 12:22 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Alainna
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Sun Jun 24, 2007 11:09 am
Alainna says... · Sun Jun 24, 2007 11:09 am
Oh my. I kinda guessed that it wasn't his baby but I never thought that this would happen....

I couldn't find any mistakes...YAY...so more comments rather than crit.

I really love Ice Cubes and your actual writing has improved. I just hope that the story all ties together and winds up well. (Not necessarily happy, just good writing...)

Can't wait for more,
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Jules the jester
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Sun Jun 24, 2007 5:17 pm
Jules the jester says... · Sun Jun 24, 2007 5:17 pm
very hard hitting. I was shocked.

And your writing has improved like alainna said if you look at teh old Cubes stuff and the new cubes it is very better writing in the new stuff :D :!:
Man:George look at this.
George: look at what?
Man: Ha made you look!
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