Er... is this supposed to be a story or a storybook?
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
If YOU are the last person on earth and someone knocks on your door - then the person behind it would be the reaper. That is just my opinion and the image that appears after reading your single line.
The surrounding world
was an ugly one,
but we needed no beauty
other than the light
within each other's eyes. - "Modern World" * topic15452
Or like, if you are the last person on earth why are you in your house? What's the point? Not like you can watch tv, or play on the internet, or listen to the radio...explore or something.
But yea...whether this is a storybook or a story, it really doesn't go here.
Since I can't 'line by line' this, I'll 'word by word' it!
A few points:
YOU
All capitals for a reason?
earth
It may just be me but usually it has a capital 'E': Earth.
suddenly
Ewww. 'Suddenly' is for writers that cannot master suspense with better words. If this is only a 'one sentence thriller' I guess it has to be acceptable but if you ever wanted to pad it out you should use long sentences then shorter ones to make impact. Bang. Impact.
...
This implies something is left unsaid. If it's unsaid, we'll never know what it is, so say it!
And to conclude:
For a single sentence it is vaguely decent. Short, obviously, but with a bit of padding out you could make something of this. Certainly a lot of unanswered questions here.
DarkLight
I am thankful for laughter, except when milk comes out of my nose. -- Woody Allen
I think I'm gonna move this to Writing Activities. What's the activity? Well, people can attempt to write one-sentence thrillers, or imagine what follows.
You are going to love some of your characters because they are you, or some facet of you, and you are going to hate some characters for the same reason. — Anne Lamott
