NovMo 2025 - Time-Shifters: Exile

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In this forest, time is fluid. We shift objects between the past, present, and future as naturally as plants photosynthesize. But when one of us breaks our most honored tradition and shifts a tree elder, he must face the consequences. No matter his intentions. No matter if he was once a hero. He is now Exiled.

Goals
  • Draft a plot
  • Make character profiles for the main characters
  • Work on my conlang
  • Write 10,000 words
  • Follow along with and comment on other threads
  • Have fun! :>

This is another attempt at my Camp NovMo April 2025 project! I called it Timeless Forevermore then... still workshopping the title =P
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AHHHH MINT. You have so many cool ideas, but I want you to sit down and finish them. xD

...still! 10,000 words is a good start. ;)
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I saw this in the workings during camp novmo! I'm glad its coming along well. I'd love to hear more about the main characters and worldbuilding.




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LOL so real XDD I shall try! o7 Thank you, Snoink!!
And oops, guess we posted almost at the same time, noah =P Thank you, and I shall do my best to deliver!! :3
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I guess I shouldn't complain too much, lol. I read one of your full books! ;)
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Someone said time-shifting? Alright, I can't wait to hear more about this >.>
Good luck, Minty!! :D
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Current progress: 787/10,000 words

i wrote a bit yesterday! did a bit of the beginning then jumped to probably the second chapter xD but errr surely i'll fill in everything eventually =P
also the stuff in brackets is more things i need to fill in or come up with words in my conlang for ^^

not the beginning:
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The burnt umber wood of the Stump had always made Theiro feel safe, like he was in an ancient place that would always exist, no matter what trifling matters the humans within were momentarily bothered by. Touching the years-smoothened wood had given him a sense of perspective. But now the walls of the Stump seemed to press inwards, trapping Theiro with the overwhelming chatter of other students and the sensation of being a bug on display.
He kept his head down as he got his food at the buffet along the walls. Theiro was so focused on blocking out the voices and gazes around him that he didn’t realize he was stuffing salad into his water cup until someone laid a hand on his shoulder. He froze and looked up.
"Hey, I know you love gardening and all, but I think these plants are long past needing any water." Yane smirked at him.
Theiro stepped to the side awkwardly, and Yane’s hand slipped away. "...Right. Thanks.” He made a beeline for an empty table. Why was she talking to him? It wasn’t like they were enemies, but there had always been somewhat of a rivalry between them over grades and [shifting] tournaments.
Yane followed and set her tray down across from him. Theiro did his best to ignore her and eat his lunch. Somehow he felt even more on display now, like a scientist had begun to prod at the bug and all the other scientists were watching and taking notes.
"I think you must have had a good reason to kill that [Elder].”
Theiro stopped mid-chew. He looked up and met Yane’s solemn purple gaze. Her expression was serious, and if she was playing a prank on him, there was no hint of it to be found. Theiro swallowed. “Well, tell that to the Council,” he said bitterly. It didn’t matter if one person believed him, especially not someone who was just as powerless as he was.
“I did. They wouldn’t listen.”
Theiro kept eating. When it became clear that she was still waiting for something, he looked up again and said, “What, do you want me to thank you? I could’ve told you the Council wouldn’t listen. They tell their stories of good and evil and [trees] bringing the light of knowledge to the world and so when I killed a [tree], it’s inevitable that they slotted me into the role of the villain. Because of course, [trees] can do no wrong. Because things are simpler that way.” Theiro stabbed a tomato. “Apparently, I should be grateful I was only exiled and not executed.”
Yane watched distractedly as the tomato juices spread across his plate. “For what it’s worth, I’m sorry this happened to you. It doesn’t make sense to me how [specific elder] could have hidden [disease], but I will look into it.” Yane gathered her tray and items and got up to leave. “And no, I don’t want you to thank me. But if what you said at the trial was true–and judging by your behavior and expressions throughout this interaction, I’m inclined to think that it is–then I would like to thank you.”
With that, Yane set a piece of paper on the table and left.
Theiro frowned and read the paper. It had [Yane’s contact info, describe] on it.
He stared at the paper for a long moment. Then Theiro slipped it into his backpack, and for the first time that day, he felt just the tiniest bit less alone.
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~1,680/10,000 words

i've written a little bit in short bursts ^^' lots of stuff in brackets to be filled in haha. need to sit down and do some proper worldbuilding >.>
also debating whether to use ipa or just muddle around and try to approximate the conlang sounds with the latin-script alphabet XP
also i changed everything to present tense lol

actually the beginning:
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Theiro hates to admit it, but it is a beautiful day to be exiled from his school, city, and everything he has ever known.
Sunlight filters through the verdant canopy and forms dancing spots on the walkway. If Theiro ignores the guards on either side of him and the Council leading the way, he can almost imagine it’s a typical day at [academy] and he’s walking to [shifting] class to practice shifting plants back and forth in time. But no [shifter] can shift the whole world back in time. And truthfully, even if he could, Theiro knows he wouldn’t have done anything differently.
The group reaches a platform ringing the trunk of a tree. As they climb the staircase inside the hollowed trunk, for a few minutes the only sound is the scattered drumbeats of shoes against wood. Eventually they emerge onto a wide platform.
Theiro stands still in awe. The cerulean sky seems to stretch forever in every direction. Below them, a sea of leaves rustles in the breeze. Through the gaps in the trees, Theiro can see [the academy]. There is the Stump, the dining hall inside the enormous hollowed out stump of [elder]. His dorm is there, [description].
Theiro turns to the guard on his left. “Do you do this to all the people put on trial? Show them the best parts of [city] so they’re desperate to be allowed to stay?” He tries to smile like he is joking, but he can’t quite make it reach his eyes.
For a moment, the guard’s gaze seems to soften. But then the Council steps onto the next walkway, and the guards hustle Theiro forwards again.
Funny to fully appreciate a place just when you’re about to leave it, Theiro thinks bitterly. He watches the sunlight gilding the edges of the houses and academy buildings until the walkway curves and [city] is lost from his view.


snippet from yane's pov:
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The lights strung along the walkways have turned on with the coming of dusk. The last tints of sunset fade as Yane strolls towards home. Then as she turns abruptly and walks briskly towards the academy. Then as she runs towards the training grounds. The balls of light turn into streaks and Yane can almost pretend it is because of her speed and not the tears threatening to flood her eyes.
You’re not enough. Never will be. See, the Council barely hears a word you say, even though you’re one of the top students in [academy]. So what was it all for? Yane, what is it all for?
Yane runs until her lungs are burning and her legs are screaming at her to stop. But they can’t drown out the thoughts in her head. So she keeps running.
She only stops when she runs out of walkways. The lights here are fighting a losing battle against the darkness of the forest. Then she begins to [shift]. Because that is how it is, and always has been. Her thoughts tell her she is never enough, and she trains to prove them wrong.
Yane focuses on a section of the railing. It is made of sturdy oak, smoothened into a cylinder. She understands the wood, the grain, the quiet thread of life connecting this piece of wood to its past and future selves. She looks into the past and catches glimpses of an oak sapling, somewhere to the north of where they are. Be more precise, she thinks. There. A few [measurement] north, a few [measurement] east. Yane reaches for ten years ago, twenty. She narrows in on the version of the oak twenty four years, two [months], and thirteen days in the past. Then Yane pulls it to the present.
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If you were doing official 50k novmo, I recommend making your academy something like "The Most Awesomest Academy in the Whole Entire World Forrealz" or something obscene like that.

... fortunately. This is not the case, hahaha.

Keep writing, Mint!!!!
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LOLL yes excellent strategy XDD
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Recap! Didn't reach my goal, but I did write 1,649/10,000 words, which is 1,349 more words than last year XD

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If I write that much more every year, it'll only take me 34 more years to win NovMo >.> Or let's see... 1,649 is about 5.5 * 300. If I write 5.5 times more each year, it'll take a little over two years? <.< Or realistically, if I don't take 22 units next fall, maybe I can do it =P


Anyways, I had fun this NovMo. I can tell that I'm a better writer than I was a few years ago, at least when it comes to short snippets and actually giving characters conflicts. But now I need to practice tying a larger work together... And doing a loooooot more worldbuilding for a world :3

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