Heya hiraeth! Sorry I haven't commented in a bit, but I've been reading. <33 I love 4 especially, I think the way you cut the lines short and have this trail of repetition throughout gave it a great tone and emotional punch. Also the sort of double-story we see in 5--I love the lines that run together and give a great sense of the state of these thoughts. Great job so far, I hope you keep writing more!! I love to see these.
thanks, que! i will write more, hopefully, but i'm taking a break - i lose interest too quickly and think a bit of time away from poeting is essential, otherwise i'll hightail into a writing block.
thanks again for the kind comments!
I was eleven years old and I'd lost my mother, and my soul. And the crucible gave me you.
I absolutely love all your poems. The deep emotions, the expressive language, a sort of beautiful melancholy and the perfect formatting . They make me feel so dreamy and the sort of lost feeling I really cant put into words. Keep up the incredible work. I really love them all.
Even After All this time The Sun never says To the Earth "You owe me" Look What happens With a Love like that It lights the Whole Sky
aaahh I loved the repetition of "i would still know" in that last poem! The blank spaces give it this mood I can't even describe it but it's fantastic. Also, "mist where it meet stone" is such a lovely image. <33
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P.S., since the month is winding down, would you want to do a poem collab with me sometime? Not necessarily for NaPo but just because we've been buddies and it might be fun
'The Answer to the Great Question... Of Life, the Universe and Everything... Is... Forty-two,' said Deep Thought, with infinite majesty and calm. — Douglas Adams, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
