There was an old man from Dundee

Yay! How very clever... not many people try to do many verses in this format since the bounciness sometimes gets repetitive or old. But this was pretty good.

Now, to make this poem even better, read it out loud. What sounds awkward and what is smooth? Change the awkward parts to something smoother and keep the good parts, unless they start sounding awkward. One helpful tip is to delete unnecessary words.

Good luck!

Hmm. On the one hand it is a fairly simple rhyme.

I'm going to rate this PG. Better safe than sorry.

*backs away from Afyr*

Pretty good limerick. Really creepy- (chills and all) -but pretty good.

As Snoink said, I would go back through and test the phrasing. Most of it flows well, but on occasion there's a "hiccup".

that was hilarious indeed!!! and in 5 mins? coool!!
"So decided to cook him a spleen"-ewwwww.
this reminds me of my poem "My Trip to the Sicks"
well done, each stanza is a limerick-wow!!

Very Very enjoyable I like ur rhyming although it's very simple