Wolf's crit shop: Revamped!

Wolf · 2008-03-13T02:41:19Z

(Okay. This is an edit of my original post. In the original, I had a goal: to get a third blue star. Now, I simply want to review.) What I critique: Mostly, I critique fiction, usually fantasy or 'Other fiction'. I've never really tried Action/Adventure or Science Fiction before, but I'm willing to. Same goes for Romance. I'm fine with that genre -- although it isn't my favourite -- so long as it hasn't got any sex scenes or anything. I can do poetry, just not very well. I'm willing to try Scripts. What I'm strongest in: Unless tons of other people already have, I'm more than happy to do an in-depth critique for you. I'll point out grammatical errors, too. I can also do critiques for wider aspects such as characters, plot, and whatnot. I'm not sure how adept I am at this, though. Bottom line: please specify what kind of critique you want for your piece. I'm happy to do a "full crit" (pointing out grammar -- line by line, I guess you could say -- and focusing on larger aspects as well) for you. "Full Edits" For those who find the term unfamiliar, it's when I print out your piece and make changes myself in pen, then scan it onto the computer and post it on YWS. I'm fine to do one of these, preferably not with long stories, though. ------- I have only about 30 - 40 mins. on YWS a day (since I'm half-grounded) so I should get one piece a day done. In case I was incoherent above, here is what you can ask for: - a critique for any genre of fiction, so long as there is no explicit sexual content. - a critique on any genre of poetry. - a critique for a Script. And the types of crits: - line-by-line/grammar/in-depth - opinions and tips/advice on larger aspects of the story (i.e, characterization, plot etc.) - a "full crit" - a "full edit" (But I can do a full crit and a full edit in the same review, if necessary.) Post Away! :D - Camille PS. All the posts up until JFW1415's on page two are from the original post here.

Sleeping Valor

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Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:34 pm

Sleeping Valor says... · Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:34 pm

Kidnapped Chapter One needs your love! =P There's two parts, as as you will notice I made the tremendous mistake of putting both parts in the same thread but in different posts. Never again. Feel free to comment on each part separately, or both at once (they're short. =P)

Thank you!

I'm like that song stuck in your head; I come and I go, but never truly dissapear.

And apparently I also write a blog.

Wolf

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Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:12 am

Wolf says... · Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:12 am

Thanks Jared, Jenna, and Keek!

I'm going to start with Harborville Prologue, and hopefully I'll get it done -- that's assuming that my mom doesn't come up and disturb my crittage. XP

everything i loved
became everything i lost.

Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html

Wolf

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Sat Mar 15, 2008 3:49 pm

Wolf says... · Sat Mar 15, 2008 3:49 pm

Come on people, I need more critiquing material!

I've done so far:
-- A moonlit stroll
-- Diary, EDITED
-- The Reason (part one)
-- HarborVille Prologue
-- All Eyes on Us
-- The Broken - Chapter One
-- EverWayward #13
-- Freedom Fortnight
-- I think I'm in Love #4
-- Benedict's Goodbye

Up next:
-- Kidnapped Chapter One

everything i loved
became everything i lost.

Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html

BigBadBear

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:16 am

BigBadBear says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:16 am

Hey, thanks for critting everything! I have one more thing for you.

Pianissimo

Thanks!

-Jared

Just write -- the rest of life will follow.

Would love help on this.

Monki

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:22 am

Monki says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:22 am

Well, if you don't get super swamped by all the maniacs who are going to throw their writing at you like crazy, you can critique this if you wish. I need some major feedback quickly.

topic25335.html

It's called Gay is My Ex.

Tom Riddle: "You read my diary?"
Harry Potter: "At first, I did not know it was your diary. I thought it was a very sad, handwritten book."

chocoholic

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:25 am

chocoholic says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:25 am

I'd love another crit on my prologue.

topic27154.html

Thanks heaps.

*Don't expect to see me around much in the next couple of weeks. School has started again, and it'll be a couple of weeks before I've settled in. If you've asked me for a critique, you will get it, but not for a little while. Sorry*

Wolf

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:40 pm

Wolf says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 6:40 pm

Sorry I'm a little behind... my mom needs to use he computer now (I think) but I'll start critiquing Kidnapped Chapter One as soon as she's done. And then I'll do all the rest. XP

everything i loved
became everything i lost.

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Aedomir

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 8:53 pm

Aedomir says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 8:53 pm

Hi Wolf! I thought you might like to see this one, they are three wolf drawings I did. (well, one that I edited!).

Click Here! Thank you!

We are all Sociopaths: The Prologue

Sociopath: So • ci • o • path noun
1. Someone who believes their behaviour is right.
2. Human.

Wolf

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Sun Mar 16, 2008 9:33 pm

Wolf says... · Sun Mar 16, 2008 9:33 pm

Awesome, thanks Aedomir!

I just finished Kidnapped Chapter One so now I'll do Pianissimo.

everything i loved
became everything i lost.

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JFW1415

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Sat Apr 05, 2008 12:08 am

JFW1415 says... · Sat Apr 05, 2008 12:08 am

*Pokes* Want another? If you get the chance, I'll love you!

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic28301.html

~JFW1415

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Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:06 pm

Wolf says... · Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:06 pm

Revamped! w00t-w00t!

I edited the original post, and I am once again open for business.

everything i loved
became everything i lost.

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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html

JFW1415

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Wed May 07, 2008 1:37 am

JFW1415 says... · Wed May 07, 2008 1:37 am

*Pokes*

Part One
Part Two

I'm kind of confused by your names (it's late,) so I'll describe what I need.

No grammar/spelling - I can catch that myself. (I just have to stop looking at it for a few days, then come back.) An overall will be greatly appreciated, as well as lines that could be stronger/don't make any sense.

If you don't like the first part, try to stick it out. The second part is a little shorter, and everyone seems to like it more. (Which is strange - I had to force out the second part, while the first slid onto the page. And they've both recieved the same amount of editing. *Shrug*)

Thanks, and take your time! I don't want to rush you. :wink:

~JFW1415

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Mon Nov 23, 2015 4:40 am

felistia says... · Mon Nov 23, 2015 4:40 am

Hi Wolf, Felistia here.
I would love if you could review the novel I am writing. I need reviews on all the chapters, but mostly on the ones past chapter 7. Feel free to dish out everything, grammar, punctuation, what would make the plot better, I would love all of that. Please review.

Spoiler

It is a story about dragons and is similar to the wings of fire, but has a completely different story. I like to leave a bit of mystery in the first and second chapter, but I explain everything as I go through the book.

https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/felistia/Search-for-the-Ruby-of-Fire-Chapter-1-124445

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