Open arms are prison cells

We lap ,
like dogs, the salt out of the wounds.

covering mine and your lips nearing mine,

Mine, mine, mine. Ick

I wish you could know how,
sitting in this too-small recliner with your shoulder
covering mine and your lips nearing mine,
I loved the sun and salt and even your waves

This isn't clear. I know you meant "I wish you could know how..(here)...I loved the sun and salt and even your waves." But the wordiness, especially with "even", cuts back at the flow.

in-between bubble gum kisses

valley-girl.

I loved this. At least you've written.

How dirty...

Still! Pretty good! Talking about the triangle thingy?

Ah, the old Brad is back (yes that's a good thing....sort of). As long as your whininess doesn't transcend into AIM conversations, it's very pretty.

Ah, this is good. Nice word choice and spacing. Very dirty indeed.

Incandescence wrote:sitting in this too-small recliner with your shoulder
covering mine and your lips nearing mine,
I loved the sun and salt and even your waves
as they pushed at my back --
get out!

Two 'mines' in the same sentence. Hmm, how about 'covering mine and your lips nearing my mouth'? Also, the last three sentences or so got confusing.