If you could be troubled, I'd appreciate a review of this, As it sits so far. It's the first chapter of my Futuristic/Trench Warfare/Post-apocalyptic WIP novel. It's Rated 18+ for Violence and Language Just to let you know. Thanks!
Would you be able to review this if you get some spare time? It's the prologue to a fantasy novella. I'm mostly looking for ways to improve my prose in general, but also how it fares as a prologue / opening chapter.
I'd be ever so grateful if you'd review this - it's my first attempt at lyrics, and a rewrite of one of my other poems. I don't know if the lyrical part worked so well, though, especially the chorus XD
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"You could look at the raindrops on your window, or you could look through the window and see the rainbow."
May you never steal, lie, or cheat. But if you must steal, then steal away my sorrows. And if you must lie, then lie with me all the nights of your life. And if you must cheat, then please, cheat death. — An Unknown Bride, Leap Year
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