Published February 6, 2010
At least twice as much
as any girl needs
one enters smoothly
the other proceeds
to tear apart flesh
bringing girl to her knees
then she opens her mouth
to let the third be
inside her somehow
though no one can see
the damage that's done
spreading thin so thoughtlessly
while moans of pleasure drown
her strained weakened plea
to be Loved from a distance
yet held like a baby.
Thoughts appreciated. 
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Very interesting... yet I enjoyed it very much! I love the part with "to tear apart flesh, bringing girl to her knees"
Great job again! I hope to see more of your writing.