You are the riddle and I am the answer. Now why dont you just figure yourself out because I want you to see me.
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~SAMMIE
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Lol, this was awesome.
So short, so simple, but a lot of bang. This would go great as a cheesy pickup line.
Not much to say about it, as there's not much here to talk about. No nitpicks, so that's good. I can see how this would also apply to a romantic situation, which gives it a more interesting side than just a quick quote.
I can't comment on the writing, since there's not much writing, so, A+ there. If I was really desperate for a nitpick, I'd tell you to break the second sentence up with a comma, but I won't.
Thank you xxdarleneexx!
Short and sweet
I like that.
Something like this:
I think it would flow better as a poem. That way, you could put breaks a pauses to draw certain parts out. For example:
You are the riddle,
I am the answer.
There are a few punctuation errors I'd like to point out as well. The second sentence would sound better as two sentences. One as a question and the other as more of an afterthought. I'm not sure if this is what you were going for, but it seemed more dramatic that way
Now, why don't you just figure yourself out?
Because I want you to see me...
I really liked the idea of the poem, especially with comparing them to riddles and answers. I could just picture someone waving their arms around, saying, "Hello! I'm right HERE." It was very enjoyable