Published March 14, 2007
A red carnation
In the center of the snow
Bleeding under ice
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I have to agree...this was actually nice--but I am not a fan of haikus. The one bit of imagery you used in this was good, but I just feel like there isn't enough substance in a haiku and I don't typically feel the need to read them again. I kind of feel like haikus are the easy way out.
A nice haiku. I disagree with Incandescence though, I like haikus, althought they can be more shallow than longer poems. Writing several haikus in series is good as well, perhaps you could continue on this theme.
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This is a good haiku. Personally, though, I think haikus tend to be worthless, in the end, and would suggest you use this image and incorporate it into a larger and more significant piece.
Thanks for the read,
Brad