Heyo xMaggie, I don't usually find or review these kinds of things, but it's going to be in the Green Room in awhile if someone doesn't, so let's jump right into it.
From an outsider perspective the descriptions of these characters that you have are a little confusing, because we don't know the context of which they're in. It seems to be a fantasy story with cats involved or some other animal, but I'm thinking they're cats from the way that you describe them. We don't really know the plot of the story and I think if you're going to post an outline of your characters, that's something beneficial and important that should come with it. If not a long description of the plot, a summary of the story that these characters are in. I'm wondering at this point if this is some sort of fan fiction story for the Warriors books.
I'm not a fan of them myself, but that's what it seems to be at this point since the characters you describe here have similar aspects to ones in the books--at least the few that I read. You also use similar terms such as talking about the mother and father and how they flirt with each other and everything of that sort, though it could just be a book about cats that are the main characters. I don't mean to point out that it's similar to something else but I thought that would relate to the review.
Something else that I wondered is why you didn't have a profile on the character of Cloud though you did on the other two characters. They seem like someone who's brought up a lot and they seem pretty crucial to the story. We see that Jinna and Arlow are siblings, though we don't get a whole lot on the description of their father compared to their mother, but this could be because they never knew him. Or at least, they share in common not having a father which I wonder if the father is dead or if they may meet him in the future.
I hope I helped and have a great day!
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