Young Writers Society

Well, it's review day and my day! haha
I usually write a lot of review, fairly quickly, on this day. So, let's start!

On the first glance on your poem, I feel like it's really not my type. No matter what happens, how hard life becomes, I'd never do anything what the character in your poem is trying to do.

Also, the structure here isn't really what it should be. You did a great job in making it neater though. But, there's a secret I wanna disclose. Press the "shift" key along with the "enter" key to bring the sentences closer and make a stanza. Try it! I hope you'll like it too.

That's pretty much for the structure and the basic outline. Let's get to the actual poem itself.

Sometimes I grab a knife and hold the blade to my wrist,

Sometimes I think it’s best if I didn’t exist,

But I never asked for your opinion,

So why are you trying to stop me?

The rain can only drown with me,

This is too violent a poem. i think that this should be an autobiography of an extremely depressd man. however the rash tone of narrating is what i admire in this poem. U R A GREAT pOET BUT MORE AN ORATIST.cUTTING VEINS and overflowing blood and encountering death is what i think likes. this is manly poem filled with violence and anxiety. are urself depressed?Else this cannot come out

Hello there, Mahnoor here for a review..

I have never seen any poems written before on this particular topic. In your poem, you talk about a broken soul, a person who is saddened by what life has to offer, and he has no other way but to kill himself. I loved the way you started
"Sometimes I grab a knife and hold the blade to my wrist,"
The statement holds a sense of urgency, and ultimately draws a reader's attention, which is a very important thing- to draw your reader's attention.

Secondly, I like the way you write. You have made everything very clear, yet there are tenuous clouds of mystery spread all over your text(which is a very good thing).

However, I believe that this whole thing could have been more impactful and influential given that you have had used stronger, more impacting words.

All in all, it's a good thing you have written, just practice more on your vocabulary and the way you choose your words(choice of words can make a big difference).

This is my favorite stanza from your poem,

Sometimes It’s best to drown in sorrow,

Knowing you are a mistake,

But is it best to tell me,

That I’m going to shatter and break?

(Very good!)

Keep writing!

Hey xJ,
I just wanted to stop in for a review. First off, this was a great piece, I loved the flow and just generally the presentation of the topic.
A few small capitalization errors I found:

Sometimes I think It’s best If I didn’t exist,

There Is no other way,

Sometimes It’s best to drown in sorrow,

Until my wrist gushes out with blood,