Published November 23, 2008
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Travel
I once chanced upon
A forsaken path
Leading me through the Golden Trees and
Thought not where it truly led me.
But rather continued-
With no feeling in heart
Not allowing time to think a true thought
And so I soon came to another branch
In the Forest we all must travel and
thought to myself "I will look back."
But found I had naught to look back to.
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I really loved this, so nicely done first off. The only thing I would suggest is in the last bit:
too I think should be changed to on
When I read through it all, Too just seemed to stick out and feel off as your last sentence, but it was really good!