Published January 18, 2011
It's been a bit. A long bit since I've Written posted a song. As soon as I can, I'll upload this on youtube. It has a punky, edgy feel, and I like it.
Another tequila shot,
I’ve laced you with the cheap drug
I’m wearing the little black dress
You love so much
You give me that knowing nod
And I know what’s on
It isn’t that big of a secret
We’re just gonna get lucky
It’s the same old thing
I never want to slow down,
I never want to make the same mistakes again
I’m living for the rush
And I’m not gonna stop tonight
I can smell the cigarette smoke
Just a silly toxin
Besides, I’ve already got you
Wrapped around my finger
It’ll be just another tick on the board
Another sin committed in the city
Why don’t we just take another wild ride
Forget about all that matters
It’s the same old thing
I never want to slow down,
I never want to make the same mistakes again
I’m living for the rush
And I’m not gonna stop tonight
It’s the same old thing
I never want to slow down,
I never want to make the same mistakes again
I’m gonna get lucky
And I’m not gonna stop tonight
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Hiya Wicked! Just Luxy here to take a look at your song. Really, I didn't find anything that stood out to me that I thought you should fix. The imagery was beautiful and the song was edgy and modern. Its the stuff that you would hear on the radio, but its got personality to it. Most songs you here these days are all the same. Yours is different, which is good. Definitely get me the link to your vid when you get it up. I'm eager to hear the song with the music!
Best,
Luxy
Goodmorning -- Sorry for such a short review. I loved your word choice, it gave the piece imagery along with an edgy vibe. I hope that is what you're going for. I hate when songs end in the chorus, but here it fit perfectly. Your rhyming didn't have any sort of pattern (which if you listen to the radio is a big trend right now) but that is just a random thought I had the urge to say. This was pretty chill piece. Good job & PM me the youtube link when you upload it. I really wanna hear the music that goes along to this.
XOXO
HaliiFaye