Published October 9, 2011
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Yeah this is a great story. You had some words repeated too close together, and the description of what monoshifters actually are wasn't as seamlessly integrated as it might have been, but other than that the actual writing was wonderful.
Wow. That was beautiful. I really really enjoyed your story and you did a very good job of editing it. I am sad for Roselyn and the war that she was in. You have written this beautifully and I really like this. Amazing job. It did take a minute or two to draw me into the story, but once I got past that, I was hooked to the very end. Great, great, great. Thanks for posting!
Keep Writing,
-Xreigon