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Dark Ones

by vmoody

Make me wonder, do it again

Who are you to me?

They told me I knew nothing

All I knew was we met long ago

In a city made of stone close to the sea

I can remember those balconies

Miles above the water and our craziness

Forbidden in loving each other

We became renegades in the pursuit of our emotions

Slowly we lost ourselves in one another

Driven by ego the love turned into hate

We into strangers with shared memories

We parted on different ways as the Sun and the Moon

One in the darkness, one the other in deceiving light

The broken unity of our departed souls

Made us both madly powerful

The bleeding heart turned into stone keeping the last drop

All the love, the hope and kindness

It's petrified saved in there

Unreachable piece of a far distant land of lust

It is better? I am still searching for the answer

Underneath the dark sky of the night

Where not even moon doesn't shine anymore

The howling wind of the empty streets

The cold rain dropping from the clouds

There's no warm, nor light

How could we dance now like our first time,

Under the stars?

My darkest memory, my bitter pleasure

The deepest desire hidden beneath my soul

Hand in hand under the rain of the night

In the absence of light our fire brights greater

The world was against us since day one

Everyday was a test of the endurance we shall have

For the endless night which was to come

Here no one can tear us apart

We can dance, not under the stars but in the rain

Here I can see your smile brighter

You can read inside my soul instead my paperwork

Nothing can hurt us 'cause no one can see us

We are the only ones in this dark endless night

The only ones who can see with our eyes closed

my beautiful dark rose

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27 Reviews

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Reviews: 27

Mon Dec 19, 2022 6:10 am
NothingMore905 wrote a review...

This is a beautiful story about 2 lovers who are against the world, they have to survive to keep eachother alive, he stays by her side and never lets go, she does the same but she is considered as the dark rose with a sharp end, they can't be separated with how cruel the world is because they are stronger together then apart, it has never been a happy beginning but one things for sure, it will be a happy ending.

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Tue Dec 13, 2022 1:15 pm
loveissourgrapes wrote a review...

Wow! This is a nice poem of yours. I love how your words painted a lot of pictures in my head. These type of poems just calm my mind and is simple yet deep. It also feels very nostalgic, somehow I just feel that way while reading this. I don't know how love feels like but this seems nice. Keep on writing, just like what @Park0311 said. Stay healthy and cozy everyone! Can't wait for Christmas day!

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Tue Dec 06, 2022 12:54 am
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Parks0311 wrote a review...

I feel like I am reading Shakespeare! I love the way you arrange the words to make it sound like it was from the 1800's. I also enjoyed the images that popped up in my head as I read this poem. It was really interesting how you connected simple things to deeper meanings. Keep up the great work! Can't wait to read more.

I’ll paraphrase Thoreau here... Rather than love, than money, than faith, than fame, than fairness, give me truth.
— Christopher Johnson McCandless