Published October 10, 2008
Loss is felt keenly
More keenly
When it is one you loved meanly
So meanly
I gave it all
All and more
For you, my eternal flower
Withered before you could bloom
Anger and fierce love
Pure and white as dove
Hatred and despair
They don’t care
I gave it all
All and more
For me, my eternal flower
Withered before I could bloom
Through the grapevine?
Fuck it, more wine!
Aggression and monster so
Fashionable, mine hoe
I gave it all
All and more
For us, my eternal flower
Withered before we could bloom
Meaningless words in stones
Fractured memories of passionate moans
Forever screaming
In a metropolis, teeming
We were all and more
Our love, that of ancient lore
I am Romeo and
You are sweet Juliet
Welcome me Juliet, into your arms
Never mind the church bell of alarms
A cold embrace for your Romeo dear
Never again for the mortals to hear
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That's relativly happyish. I thought it was actually quite sweet and cute myself. Saying that, I think Johnny Depp as Sweeny Todd is quite sweet and cute. And overbearingly hot. Off topic anyway!
And please, enough with the Dora. More with the Bee.
Now that was powerful poetry.
You have serious talent Dora.
But please write about something more happy next time.