Published October 30, 2011
You reduce me;
I am so small.
Of all things in this world
You are what breaks me
To this.
I am so small.
Nothing else;
You blind me from it all.
I drift from the lights,
From the warmth,
To the seaside
Just to stand.
The sand is cold
And the rocks stab at my feet
You’re out there somewhere;
Warm, laughing?
I’m here thinking of you,
Laughter behind me.
I’m drawn
Out here
By the dark sea.
So small I am
Blinded from all else.
Cold, numb. Lost.
I want you.
I've been reduced to this...
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Very nice work. I really like how the feeling is so powerful and strong.
Clear words and courage in expressing them. It's great.
Hello there!!
I genuinely like this poem. My favorite part of it was the feeling of the whole thing. It felt sort of rambling in a good way, like you'd taken your thoughts from your mind as you thought them and put them on paper, but it didn't come off too confusing as poems like these often are. Great work there!
One thing I noticed and might change about this poem is how many times you used the word "small". It felt a little bit repetitious to me, but not in a good way. That's just me nitpicking, though. There's really not much I could say to you to improve this poem since I love it just the way that it is.
This is my favorite part of the poem. It sums up everything you wrote about in the poem and basically says, "This is what I am, and you've made me this." Love it.
Great work!
-Rose
love the poem so much. no changes needed. Perfection in writing poetry, bravo and keep writing. possible title could be Lost Without You