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Samuel Abbett’s origin: The Playground

by vampricone6783


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.

*This is the origin of a character from my “The Playground” stories. This is the last origin in this series. Gacha Club character designs are on my wall. You may read other stories that connect to this one underneath my “The Playground” folder. Enjoy!*

Seven year old Samuel was with his friend, Vicky, following a rotting corpse bride woman named Juliet at 12:30 A.M. , in a dark forest.

They were curious as ever to where she’d take them…

They ended up in a carnival and Juliet said:

“I’d like for you to meet the groom..”

A decaying, rotten clown that smelled of rancid, spoiled eggs appeared out of the darkness and snatched Samuel.

“W-w-what are you going to do w—w-with Vicky?” Samuel asked, panic creeping up his spine as the clown dragged him to a ripped up tent.

“Don’t worry about her, worry about yourself.” The clown said, ripping him open with his claws.

Samuel couldn’t even scream, the blood crawled up his throat and dribbled down.

But his torture was only just beginning.

The clown, with both bloody claws, grabbed Samuel’s arms and-

RIPPPPP

Samuel stared in horror at the gore before him.

“HehE…had enough?” The clown asked.

“Mmphhmpmugh-“

“Oh, you want more?” He smiled at the poor boy, who only knew that whatever was coming next was going to be terrible-

“Alright, more it is!” The clown giggled.

Quicker than Satan’s grasp, the clown tore out the child’s eyes, done with the evil.

Samuel just lay there, a pitiful heap of odd-textured flesh and ruby red liquid pooling around him…


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Tue Nov 21, 2023 12:03 am
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FrozenEntropy wrote a review...



Oi! Looks like I'm gonna hit you with the uno reverse card this time! Without further ado...

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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

It is time for the gruesome S’more…

Top Graham Cracker - A young boy named Samuel and his friend Vicky find themselves within a dark forest, trailing behind a dead body outfitted like a bride of all things. Horrifying, truly, but the worst is yet to come when they meet the groom!

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - In my opinion, more descriptive elements could be introduced. What we get is really good, and I wouldn't suggest padding it with so much description that the short story overstays its welcome. Just a little more description of the fear and intrigue of the children, the appearance and grotesqueness of the corpses, and the details of the brutal assault that happens at the end of the story, would help build the sense of immersion and dread!

Chocolate Bar - Hook. The Hook landed, hook line and sinker! Two children trailing a corpse bride in a dark forest? Admittedly, I haven't checked out the former entries into this series. Despite that, the opening scene and the contents of this story absolutely hooked me enough to interest me in what lead up to this point, and made me want to follow whatever events happen next! Oh, and the sheer brutality of Samuel's fate was very daring and shocking, and I happen to be a sucker for works that take me by surprise with their boldness.

Closing Graham Cracker - Well then... Samuel appears to be dead, poor guy. As bad as I feel for him, I'm curious what exactly the corpse monsters plan on doing with Vicky. Somehow, I wouldn't be surprised if an even worse fate were dealt to her.

I wish you a lovely day/night!




vampricone6783 says...


Thank you! :>




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