Published April 25, 2009
I’m so cocked,
Crooked.
I’m so torn,
Tainted.
I’m so deadly,
Dreadful,
Disgusting.
I walk so gangly,
Gaunt.
I smile so faint,
Failure.
I live so pierced,
Painstakingly,
Pieced.
You’re so calm,
Consummate.
You’re so tall,
Taking.
You’re so desirable,
Delicate,
Datable.
You walk so graceful,
Guiltless.
You smile so finely,
Figuratively.
You live so perfect,
Peacefully,
Placed.
We’re so opposite,
Other.
We’re so truth,
Talking.
We’re so different,
Discrepant,
Dissimilar.
We don’t belong.
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I really love the poem.
Short concise lines, it doesn't always have to be long to be good.
I like the last stanza the most.
"We’re so opposite,
Other.
We’re so truth,
Talking.
We’re so different,
Discrepant,
Dissimilar."
Kudos to you (Y) Keep writing!
on second thought, forget my suggestion... :] it'll totally ruin the rest of it :] LOVE it! :]
wow! i just love it! especially this stanza:
opinionated with a tinge of sarcasm... although it makes more sense to me if "Peacefully placed" was just one line... :]