Published December 3, 2010
The Kill
It's the empty feeling inside
It's the things I don't confide
In you when we lie awake
You can't even tell my smiles fake
And the only difference is
I don't have anyone else
And the only thing to say
is
Kiss me underwater, kiss me under the moon
I can't care less, death couldn't come too soon
Take me under your wing, take me over the hill
I've given in, given myself to the kill
And tell me, why is it that we lie...
What are all the monstrous secrets we hide...
And do we even know the truth...
About who we are and what we do
Tell me you'll
Kiss me underwater, kiss me under the moon
I can't care less, death couldn't come to soon
Take me under your wing, take me over the hill
I've given in, given myself to the kill
And the only difference is
I don't have anyone else
And the only thing to say
is
Kiss me underwater, kiss me under the moon
I can't care less, death couldn't come to soon
Take me under your wing, take me over the hill
I've given in, given myself to the kill
The kill
The kill
The kill....
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These lyrics are awesome!
Definately my type of music.
I can imagine singing along to this
Well done ! xxx
hey undeadbunnie. mind if i sneak around?
first stanza is good, except for this one:
i don't know. it just got my attention. but maybe i'm wrong about that. anyway.
maybe it's better if you include the word "is" with the last line. but still, it's your preference.
over all, it's a nice song. you have nice expressive lyrics. just watch out for grammar, because a lot of songs are also being noticed because of simple mistakes. however, that's not a big deal.
keep writing and stay motivated.
-telle. <3
My first lyric to critt in a long time. my general impression is that this was pretty good and really cool. Perhaps more cool then good
Reason why is beacuse I felt this energy in your lyrics that were expressed very well but i think it was still expressed too little. You used the chorus too much.
Other wise if you wouldnt use the chorus that much I think it would be truly awesome.
So for next time what you do is check are my lyics all the same?
Mite it get a bit boring for the reader?
But other wise it was great. It is also very hard to judge lyrics withought the music.
These lyrics are really good! I've always wished I could write a song, but I just don't have the inspiration. You are very talented, though:)
Wow i thought this was really good. I wonder if you put it into song, would it be a slow jam or heavy? I donno, i think it could go ether way, it was really good. Great imagination in it to. lots of thought
I believe that you cant actually criticize a songs lyrics until u put it into a song. Personally i thought the lyrics were
very good nice job
btw do you sing ?
Yours Truly
- Stephene
I love these lyrics I can imagine what it might sound like with music and voice well done!