i exist but im considered useless

Interpretations/Comments (Only Stanzas 1 and 2):

Line 1 (Surrounding ocean with a pale gray sky) - The immediate usage of "ocean" and "pale gray sky" feels like a symbolization of depression or negative/decreasing mental health.
Line 2 (the lonely iceberg that feels the cold) - Interesting choice of personification.
Line 3 (loud crickets make my ears bleed deep) - "Loud crickets" may represent a parents' constant nagging or people repetitively pointing out ones flaws and imperfections to the point where self harm is implied.
Line 4 (middle child I am, nothing more or less) - Reducing oneself to a single label of a middle child with "nothing more or less" exemplifies inferiority, perhaps.
Line 5 (Scorch of the star yet still cold blooded ) - "Scorch of the star" may represent heat/fire, while "cold blooded" represents cold/ice. Ice/negativity still overrides fire/positivity, no matter the intensity of warmth.
Line 6 (others filled with emotions and flowers) - Theme of nature representing particular aspects of life such as individuals' personalities.
Line 7 (so cramped till things turn monotoned) - There is this sense of doomsday claustrophobia until one becomes used it, then it'll morph into hollowness and numbness.
Line 8 (the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome) - Untouched and out in the open with nobody that interacts, one has their guard up with walls that won't come down and may become easily triggered because maybe one just doesn't care but deep down truly does.

Review:
Incredibly thought-provoking and looks like a cry for help. Somewhat random and all over the place, perhaps representing what a mess this person is and a view inside this person's mental health. I enjoyed reading it.

- Lil, aka HalfheartedAmateur

Interpretations/Comments (Only Stanzas 1 and 2):

Line 1 (Surrounding ocean with a pale gray sky) - The immediate usage of "ocean" and "pale gray sky" feels like a symbolization of depression or negative/decreasing mental health.
Line 2 (the lonely iceberg that feels the cold) - Interesting choice of personification.
Line 3 (loud crickets make my ears bleed deep) - "Loud crickets" may represent a parents' constant nagging or people repetitively pointing out ones flaws and imperfections to the point where self harm is implied.
Line 4 (middle child I am, nothing more or less) - Reducing oneself to a single label of a middle child with "nothing more or less" exemplifies inferiority, perhaps.
Line 5 (Scorch of the star yet still cold blooded ) - "Scorch of the star" may represent heat/fire, while "cold blooded" represents cold/ice. Ice/negativity still overrides fire/positivity, no matter the intensity of warmth.
Line 6 (others filled with emotions and flowers) - Theme of nature representing particular aspects of life such as individuals' personalities.
Line 7 (so cramped till things turn monotoned) - There is this sense of doomsday claustrophobia until one becomes used it, then it'll morph into hollowness and numbness.
Line 8 (the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome) - Untouched and out in the open with nobody that interacts, one has their guard up with walls that won't come down and may become easily triggered because maybe one just doesn't care but deep down truly does.

Review:
Incredibly thought-provoking and looks like a cry for help. Somewhat random and all over the place, perhaps representing what a mess this person is and a view inside this person's mental health. I enjoyed reading it.

- Lil, aka HalfheartedAmateur

Hey, Hey! Kz in for a (short) review!

My favorite line:

"the lonely iceberg that feels the cold

loud crickets make my ears bleed deep

middle child I am, nothing more or less"

This is relatable, I am also the middle child, lol.

The line that caught my eye:
"the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome"


"Scorch of the star yet still cold blooded

others filled with emotions and flowers

so cramped till things turn monotoned

the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome

Suffocated atmosphere and chilling ankles

famous painting in a museum, strict

blindfolded sharp sight seeking for validation

lifeless bloom thrown, expectations and standards

Endless staring waiting for a korero

the dirty socks aren't clean anymore

absent craving I want chocolate

outdated technology, not working and simple"

This paints a very interesting picture in my head! as always, keep writing!

Have a good morning/mid-day/evening/night!

Surrounding ocean with a pale gray sky
the lonely iceberg that feels the cold
loud crickets make my ears bleed deep
middle child I am, nothing more or less

The way you used the environment to describe the way you feel was smart.

Scorch of the star yet still cold blooded
others filled with emotions and flowers
so cramped till things turn monotoned
the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome

Suffocated atmosphere and chilling ankles
famous painting in a museum, strict
blindfolded sharp sight seeking for validation
lifeless bloom thrown, expectations and standards

Social customs/standards are hard to meet and the way you have portrayed it is tangible.

Endless staring waiting for a korero
the dirty socks aren't clean anymore
absent craving I want chocolate
outdated technology, not working and simple

I like how you mentioned these things as it shows the simple things that we want in our life.

Gloomy self-centered day, you to blame
the loop is the same every time
it's not okay to not feed my pet
broken balloon that'll never pop

Personally I do not understand the last two lines, but I believe it is so true how we blame bad luck for such boredom and dullness.

Conclusion: A very nice piece of writing that accurately explains the subject line. 3.5 out of 5 (if it rhymed a bit, it may have been better)

Surrounding ocean with a pale gray sky

the lonely iceberg that feels the cold

loud crickets make my ears bleed deep

middle child I am, nothing more or less


I'm a middle child as well. The things other children will never understand. I love the description of the ocean as well as the sky.


Scorch of the star yet still cold blooded

others filled with emotions and flowers

so cramped till things turn monotoned

the cold pizza crust, hard and bothersome


It's hard to believe that anything to be warm in the dead of night. I used to jump on my trampoline at night until my feet became numb.


Suffocated atmosphere and chilling ankles

famous painting in a museum, strict

blindfolded sharp sight seeking for validation

lifeless bloom thrown, expectations and standards

Endless staring waiting for a korero


Sometimes we wonder what the point in our life is.


the dirty socks aren't clean anymore

absent craving I want chocolate

outdated technology, not working and simple

Gloomy self-centered day, you to blame

the loop is the same every time

it's not okay to not feed my pet

broken balloon that'll never pop


Overall: Great poem.