He had huge baby blue eyes, a tiny pink nose, and wide chipmunk-like cheeks (he always did said, "the better to store nuts with, you always need spare." and then he'd wink) Not to mention he was full of himself. If someone didn't compliment him in less than 5 minutes, he'd throw a spaz attack. He'd would scream and yell, "If you don't tell me I'm irresistible or beautiful, I'll melt!!!! You don't wanna be a murderer, do you?" And if you replied yes he would "accidentally" cough up hairballs on you. Don't even let me get started on his little brother. He would torture the hamster-sized baby, having him get ran over by cars, dressing him up as a Mexican maid, and forcing him to do all the labor. He also drank coffee heavily from his Alcatraz mug and refused any coffee not within the mug.
But other than that, Hamtaro was your average cat.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Well I can see that this one was clearly just meant to be a bit of a silly joke and not really have any actual substance to it and I think in that way it does a pretty good job. Personally I don't really find it that funny but it does seem to be intended as funny at least so I can see some of the humor. The flow of this seems off but then you mentioned that this is just a brain splurge so that might be the cause of that which is fine.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well I don't that first part really did anything for me but the last part was I think the best bit of humor that you had. That one line was the only thing that actually managed to crack me up so that was a great choice there.
Aaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Well not much to really say on this. Its a very short piece and it isn't really meant to be an actual story or anything like that so I can't really be criticizing anything. Regardless its still an okay story. Mostly just "meh" is what I would say to this one. Sorry if that came off unnecessarily harsh on this obviously not meant to be taken seriously story.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
That was very cute and funny! But I could see that you could do more to this to make this even more funny. Remember, after someone speaking; you take a new line. Fun! Hehe.
Im sad no one is replying to this excerpt from my mind.
haha. I loved it. this was really cute.
Don't forget his twin brother. I love Hamtaro, "Telll me I'm irisistable!"