Ever wondered what "hell" felt like?
You'll be wrapped upon by scorching, suffocating heat and the only sound you'll hear would be the gnashing of teeth like fingernails scratching the surface of the blackboard and evil laughters aimed towards your agony. The site would be purely fiery crimson and auburn and the burning air becomes visible, distorting the remaining cool air making it even hotter than the fire itself. And that spot, that spot is where you'll be placed.
The way that you're positioned is based on how you lived. If you lived an empty life but without evil, surely you wouldn't be positioned in such a way that your suffering is prolonged. You're positioned very far from the fire almost like not feeling any heat but is definitely uncomfortable. When your life is majorly evil but have done some good deeds, you'll be placed a little closer with minimal but impossible to ignore. A repugnant life, completely filled with malice, would be obvious. You will be placed within the flames, positioned upside down. The torrid ground is in contact with your face while your feet gets chained exactly at the ankle malleoli where it is most painful. This is definitely the worst possible punishment. Being more angelic than bad, on the other hand, wouldn't put you anywhere near such a place. You'll feel the greatest comfort and contentment any soul could reach afterlife. Everything would be beautiful, just like what you made others feel during your lifetime. What about a person with no trace of anything bad in her life, of innocence and purity? That person would be a saint. And we know that saints doesn't feel contentment nor comfort. He will feel something more than that. He will feel fulfilment.
That is why all of the girls and boys should start doing difficult but good deeds, rather than easy yet bad deeds. Not that the thought is used as a bribe, it's merely a depiction of the consequences of everything that each one does.
But of course, this is just a theory. It's a choice of yours whether to believe it or not.
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So uhh I'm a bit.. confused. I thought this was about hell, but then I think it started talking about heaven. I like the "Ever wondered what "hell" felt like?" maybe try doing the same thing once you start talking about heaven. "Ever wonder what "heaven" felt like?"
And another thing, maybe try describing hell as more unrealistic things. Whenever some one threatens me or my friends withstupid things like "Ima rip yo guts out nd burn em infrunna you!!" It's seriously the stupidest way you can threaten someone because humans can't do that. Instead, a good threat or a scarier threat would be "Ima beat you up witha b-ball bat, nd me en my' homies gonna take yo down foo!" okay.. actually that sucks, unless you are some big tall person xD but just somethig realistic is a good threat, you know something that you can actually do. So Hell should be the opposite, because Hell is not humanly, it does not treat the people there like humans, and so maybe also try using more deathly or decomposing words, that feel more undesirable.
I really like how you phrased a few things. overall great job!! Sorry if this came off as rude or judgemental, it is very not I'm just not that great at sugar coating stuff or whatever.
Thanks for your frank review, FerrumCorde. I took this as a compliment actually cause it seems like you're teaching me how to be a better writer and I appreciate it. Thank you, and I'll take note of what you just said.
I have sometimes wondered what it would be like. But then I see the pictures and hear that your soul will be forever burning in an eternal hell. That doesn’t really sound like an ideal place to be or want to go. I mean, seriously who in their right minds would want to sit there and burn eternally? I know I would not.
Anyways, I really did like the theory of what you have written. It shows how you think or what you really think about hell and what it would be like. But, I wonder why would you think about something like this? Was it a random conversation between you and friends? Or was it just something that you thought of one day and decided to write about? And the way that you described hell…I believe that it is classic. Lol, kind of scared me a little and heightened the fact that I DO NOT want to go there.
All in all, I loved it and I think you should do a class on descriptive writing because I will got the feeling that the flames were burning. The imagination is great.
KEEP WRITING AND ALWAYS BE WRITE! <3
Hey Soulful writer, thanks for your review. I was actually planning to write about death since I've recently wrote something about reborn and I thout it's be cool to write something opposite to what I've written. Thank yoi so much for loving it!