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Intro and Opening Thoughts
This was quite the dark story, but I liked the concept and how you carried it out! From my interpretation, it is a story about a sculptor who decides that to make his sculptures more realistic, he will use the dead bodies of people. At the end of the story, he wraps himself in clay as a final art piece to reveal why his art has been so good all these years.
How I Felt When I Read Your Piece
While I was reading your story, I felt a very unsettling feeling because the sculptor was taking dead bodies and using them for the sculpture. I also felt worried that the author would get caught or do something even worse to create his sculptures.
What Intruiged Me About Your Piece
I knew something dark was going to happen in the story, but I did not expect that the artist would dig up bodies from the graveyard to be used! It also intruiged and surprised me when the artist himself killed himself to make an art piece.
What I Liked About Your Piece
I liked the concept of the story and the idea, and how you kept suspense throughout the story, keeping the readers on the edge of their seats and wanting to know more. I also liked how you portrayed the personality and perspective of the artist, and how he thought that he was doing good and making amazing art by wrapping dead bodies in clay. You also did a nice job of keeping suspense at the end and revealing finally thet the artist was actually sculpting himself.
What I Thought You Could Improve On
There were a couple of times in the story where you were kind of just listing things, and it was like a step-by-step narrating, like saying, "I did this and then this then this because this" which can be a little repetitive and can get uninteresting for the reader.
This could just be me, but the pacing for the story felt a little bit rushed and like you were trying the get to the climax of the story as quickly as possible. You could slow down a little and add more details, like metaphors or other figurative language to be a little more descriptive, like of the clay's specific texture or what the dead bodies smelled like.
And remember that these are all suggestions, so don't use them if you feel like they don't make sense or don't fit the story. This is, after all, your story!
Conclusion and Closing Thoughts
Overall, this was a dark, suspenseful story that intrigued readers and tells a message of how a path to fame gone too far might end in your downfall and change your life forever. I hope you will keep writing stories and coming up with ideas!
Points: 17338
Reviews: 127
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