Published April 20, 2013
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This is very honorable. I love you poetic description of a mother and her so-called job. The o ly thing I strongly suggest is that you add punctuation at the ends of the verses. It's actually the same rules for writing a sentence in a poem. Just throwing that out there.
This is Hamza for review. I am new here.
I like all the emotions you put in your narrative. But you didn't care much about the punctuations, or perhaps you were in a hurry while typing it.
The way you wrote it seems like you are attempting to write it as a poem. Am I write?
On the whole, I love your writing and your mom will be blissful to read it. I hope you showed it to your mom.
Thanks and yeah I was in a hurry to write it and yeah it was ment as a poem
Eman, this is really deep and heartfelt. Careful with grammar errors (subject verb agreement, spelling...etc...) your emotions were expressed beautifully. This "woman" seems admirable. KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!