Published October 24, 2008
[/u]Verse 1
Thought i was alone
you came
Thought i was betrayed
you stayed
Thought that i was going through life... without anything
[u]Verse 1 Bridge thing
Thought i was weak
but your strong
Thought i was strange
but you showed me the way
Thought i was useless... but you showed me how to live
[u]Chorus
You were Always there for me ...when i thought wasnt free
to live for you
(to live for you....)
You were always there for me... when i thought i couldnt see
to see you
you were always there
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Hello syd552,
Welcome to Young Writers Society!! I really liked your poem. The meaning is incredible and more people should realize the truth that your poem holds- God is always there for us no matter what. Nice work!
I only saw a few mistakes:
There shouldn't be a space after the periods
First of all, I really liked this stanza. Again, the space after the periods needs fixing. And in the second line it says "but your strong", it should say "but you're strong". You just put the wrong "your" in there, no biggy though
Again, the spaces after the periods needs to be fixed. There shouldn't be a space before or after.
I think you mean "when I thought I wasn't free"
And the beginning of each new line should be capitalized. Oh and one more thing, words like "couldn't" and "wasn't" should have apostrophes after the "n's". So you see, it was just a little punctuation you were missing. Other than that, great song!!
cheers! Keep on writing
-thevoiceinside