Sizzling Summers

by swim chick

Published May 20, 2006

This is the best story I've written in a long time! I'm sooo proud of it! I hope that you love it as much as I do. My teacher even suggests that I enter it into a state writing contest! Please tell what you think I should do to make it better! :D

There once was a pig named Harold. He was so hot that all of the sows thought he would turn into hickory smoked bacon! But unfortuantly he already had a lady sow. One day the farmer came and shot his girlfriend so he fell in love with the chicken. Unfortuantly he got got shot and the farmer tried to pass him off as sushi for the unsuspecting house guests. THey all died of food poisoning. How sad. THE END

This is no joke... I'm seriously expecting to win first place! Don't you all agree?! I LOVE WRITING!!! Even my mommy and pappy say that I should send it in for publishing. Please help me correct it so I can WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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kaitlyn
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kaitlyn wrote a review Review · Aug 24, 2020

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.

First Impression: Well...I think this one is meant to be a joke...I might be wrong but from the way that everything is written it seems to be intended that way. There is actually some kind of plot that's pretty clear and that's usually a sign of a joke if the story is this short. So this one was actually hilarious, well they all died but still it is really funny and I think this being on r/jokes or something might actually win something. And those two paragraphs with the declaration of submitting this to a contest are also really well done I think. Those just elevate this to the next level in terms of how funny this is.

Anyway let's get right to it,

This is the best story I've written in a long time! I'm sooo proud of it! I hope that you love it as much as I do. My teacher even suggests that I enter it into a state writing contest! Please tell what you think I should do to make it better! :D


Well because of the context this makes this one of the funniest author's notes that I've read on here.

There once was a pig named Harold. He was so hot that all of the sows thought he would turn into hickory smoked bacon! But unfortuantly he already had a lady sow. One day the farmer came and shot his girlfriend so he fell in love with the chicken. Unfortuantly he got got shot and the farmer tried to pass him off as sushi for the unsuspecting house guests. THey all died of food poisoning. How sad. THE END


Okaayy spotted a couple of typos in there. That should be they and that word is unfortunately in both cases. Other than those typos this is actually a pretty clear and easy to understand all things that make it even funnier so nothing to add here.

This is no joke... I'm seriously expecting to win first place! Don't you all agree?! I LOVE WRITING!!! Even my mommy and pappy say that I should send it in for publishing. Please help me correct it so I can WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Of course this isn't a joke.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: So this one was a pretty little joke fic. I don't know why them dying of food poisoning is making me crack up so much but it is. Overall great job here.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

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Jiggity
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Jiggity commented Comment · May 23, 2006

Cute.

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Shine
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Shine commented Comment · May 21, 2006

No wonder it is the best story.:)

Is the state writing contest is about writing a short story,as short as four lines?



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