Published April 26, 2008
Tonight I lassoed a shooting star
and up it took me really quite far
it pulled me through the glittering sky
where magic swirls and dreams can fly
where spirits rise and burdens lift
on heaven's breath possibilities drift
then I steered it back home 'cause I knew
I'd rather look up from the ground here with you
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I liked this. Don't change a thing.
I really like this! The second line didn't flow very well, maybe you could reword it a little? The rest was great! Also it had no puncuation. Other than that this was excellent!
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