Hello. Welcome here. You're quite new I see. Perhaps no one has told you yet? Er... There's a 2:1 policy on this site. For every one literary post you must have reviewed 2 other works. I suppose someone shall tell you about it more understandably later.
Yeah, now on to this poem.
It's quite good. Although I think that the language you used here fits prose more than poetry. Perhaps this piece would be better as a story? It ust really doesn't strike me much as a poem. This piece lacks imagery for instance.
Anyway, Good luck with your writing.
Wether this be poetry or not I really enjoyed it.
--Knightly
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