Radrook here to provide a review. Please note that if I offend in any way manner or form it was totally unintentional and I offer my apology beforehand. I only provide my opinion to help others become better writers and nothing else. That having been said:
Thanks for this poem concerning the plight of women. Please note that I understand it to be a reference to women in the Third World countries since women in the industrialized West are doing quite well and in some cases do even better than men in terms of employment. I guess this is due in a large part to the Women’s Liberation Movement which actively struggled to do away with the unfair discriminatory practices that were very prevalent at one time such as unequal pay for equal work and not being allowed to vote, restrictions from certain colleges and professions, permission od wife beating, and not paid leave of absence from employment during the time missed for giving birth. All these are no longer in force in the Western World. However, in countries which are ruled by Islamic traditions women are definitely treated in a far more severe way then men are. Some are even allowed to be disfigured are put to death when they are found to be unfaithful to their husbands. Others are forced to undergo ritual female circumcision which causes them lifelong health problems. till others are used by the husbands as unpaid farm labor or as part of a harem. In such countries the lamentation expressed in the poem is certainly very relevant indeed.
Here is an article that goes into other details such as forced prostitution and violence and child neglect
http://www.wrecked.org/community/injust ... nst-women/
Suggestions
The poem can be improved by fewer commas and by using the period whenever a full sentence is employed.
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