Lovely twists~

hi! It's ocean here to shoot you a quick review ଘ(੭ˊᵕˋ)੭* ੈ✩‧˚

Now shall we dive in?

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So to me it seems like this is about unrequited love where the narrator tries very hard to get the other person to love said narrator back.
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Emotions that flow together

Affection and Selflessness
Narrator does not care about their own emotions but more about how their love interest feels about them
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Lines I liked

"Eyes full of love"
"A heart of cosmos"
"Tears for the one who tears my heart"
"Lips to call out only your name"
"Mind drowned in your memories"
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The love in this poem is tender yet the speaker feels unseen.

I F-ING LOVED THIS POEM THO <3
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Keep on swimming, Ocean ( *ˊᵕˋ)

Nice poem written by the author.

"I got tears for the one
who tears my heart."
This is a typical case of one sided love (as it seems to me).
When you love, you cry, you feel, for the one who doesn't even know you exist, it hurts badly. But you are so drowned in that pool of love that you forget that person is just hurting you, and doesn't even care about you. A very simple yet deep and powerful poem.

Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.

This is amazing. I feel the genuine hurt and love from this writing. This poem hits hard. When you say "I have mind drowned in your memories" that hit me like a train. It is so beautiful.

The yearning in this poem is so potent it is almost a tangible presences. The simple short sentences mixed with the complex and select vocabulary communicates a deeper understanding to the reader. I was specifically caught by the fifth stanza. In this section you write, "I have mind drowned in your memories

And thoughts

that I want to share..

But you...

don't really seem to care...." In these few sentences there is a great deal of charges emotion. Whether or not it was your intention, the short incomplete thoughts that are separate really add to the loneliness addressed. Overall, the poem leaves, whoever may come across it, with a sense of artistic incompleteness (not in a bad way). It shares the human part of everyone that longs for their other half. It is truly incredible how you managed to capture such a raw emotion in such a short poem. You have a great deal of talent and I look forward to what you may do with it.

Wow, this poem hit deep. The way you captured unrequited love and longing is just beautifully heartbreaking. Every line carries so much emotion, and that line "I got tears for the one, who tears my heart"? Absolutely beautiful. Each and every line hit me with a wave of emotion. It’s simple yet powerful, just like the emotions it conveys. I seriously love this piece! Keep writing more like this, you have a way with words!