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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
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It’s my first archaeological excavation fresh out of college. We’re in Mexico in a village that is a few miles away from a bog where a lone tower was discovered peeping above the treetops. However, this tower should not be here. It is not of Mayan or Aztec design. What’s even more curious is the fact that we have never found this type of rock anywhere on Earth.
Ooooh well starting off there it seemed like we were going to have a bit of a fairly neutral sort of prologue that usually tends to just detail sort of a bit of backstory, but well it seems we've got something much more interesting going on here right off the bat with these extraterrestrial rocks coming into play and making things very interesting indeed.
I was very surprised when they contacted me. I mean I just got my Bachelor’s degree, and I haven’t been on any excavations or digs in my life. However, I am still Zach the Great… translator. I am one of the few on the team that can speak Spanish fluently. That’s why I was put in the village to ask around instead of actually at the excavation. However, I plan on going to the site to report what I’ve discovered.
Okayy this is a nice bit of character development as well. I am loving that little undercurrent, its always a wonderful surprise to have a bit of that slipping in as a reader. I think you do a good job here of just generally painting the picture of who our protagonist and what they are doing here and why. Let's see how you end this off here.
I had asked almost everyone in the town about the tower. Most said that they had been to that bog before and have never seen that tower before. However, I stumbled upon a man who also said that, but he also said much, much more. He said that he had been to the bog before, and the tower had never been there. Until one day, a good foot of the tower was sticking out of the bog. He, then, visited it everyday and watched it “grow” about a foot a day until it stopped “growing” about two weeks ago. I may not be an astrophysicist, but I do know that’s not normal.
Welll that's certainly quite a moment to end on although I do have to say, this one doesn't fully capture the idea of the old sort of cliffhanger here nor does it really come to the smoothest of endings there. It seems like a bit of an abrupt cut off there and I think maybe you want to think about smoothing that out a bit or even just making it super abrupt and creating a proper cliffhanger. Either way we do have a pretty solid prologue here and I think it does its job pretty well here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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