Sorry.

Hi there. Lavvi in to review.

So, really, I'm going to focus on the punctuation here. Lay off the full-stops (the periods) because it makes the entire poem read abruptly and it looks ugly, to be frank. Here, in this poem, you can get away with some semi-colons and most definitely commas, and only the odd period. It will even out the fluidity of the poem and it will read a whole lot better than originally.

Yours,
Lavvi

Thanks guys I will definatly take the advice you all have given me (:

It spoke to me it reminds me of what a lot of people go through these days so nice job!!!

I agree with Soulkana, different line spacing might be better.

Also, the flow doesn't seem quite right. Have fun playing with words and stuff--it's important to get your feelings on paper, but it's also important to do it in.....and artsy way. (I can't think of how else to describe it.)

Overall, pretty good.

Hey there, I began reading this and I was inspired to put in my 2 cents. So here it goes, this will be quick.
"She’s sorry she can’t trust,
That’s something she’ll have to rise above. -I love this sentence
She’s sorry things aren’t what you planned
She has trouble making her mind up.
She’s sorry there’s a wall between her and the rest
Because the truth is she tries to break it down and let you in.
She’s sorry you feel the way you do
The truth is, her feelings for you builds up within.- there's a grammatical error here. It should be 'her feelings for you build up within'
She’s sorry she doesn’t know how she feels.
It’s eating her up inside, the thought of you leaving, the thought of you thinking she doesn’t care, the thought of it all being over.|"

Well it is short and simple and cares a world's worth of meaning which is what I truly love. If you can make your audience feel without making them think 'when does this come to an end' then you have done something really right. I love it, little error, little flaw. Good job!
xx Upile xxx

I think this is pretty amazing. I can empathize with what you have written whereas I sometimes think people write poetry just for the sake of it.

She’s sorry she can’t trust,
That’s something she’ll have to rise above.
She’s sorry things aren’t what you planned
She has trouble making her mind up.
She’s sorry there’s a wall between her and the rest
Because the truth is she tries to break it down and let you in.
She’s sorry you feel the way you do
The truth is, her feelings for you builds up within.
She’s sorry she doesn’t know how she feels.
It’s eating her up inside,
the thought of you leaving,
the thought of you thinking she doesn’t care,
the thought of it all being over.