Published December 3, 2007
*Something short that I wrote as I was daydreaming.
Enclosing my view of the world, please get out of my head.
I open my eyes; all I see, all I desperately want.
You, you, you.
Your grip tears into my flesh, as mine does unto yours,
I'm begging to not let go.
Hair that sweeps ever so gently across my neck, sweetest ecstasy…
A touch too real.
Our breathing halts.
And let go, go, go…
Falling into you,
Take me where you'd like.
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Well...Its really good.
Nice work!
Genevieve
You know how every once in a while you read something that is so genuine it makes you forget you're reading this on a computer screen... i think you just hit the nail on the head. Kudos.
I absolutely adore this line simple because of the great imagery that I got from this
Overall I liked this quite a bit, and when your breath halted, I must say that mine did too
Keep daydreaming!